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Abram86

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I built a free website and I did everything off of my Android phone and I just purchased a domain today. Could you guys visit and let me know what you all think about it? Let me know if I can do anything more to enhance it
www.xtremeautotx.com


Xtreme Auto
 
Your about page needs to be about you and your business not a survey. You might want to add some packages and some add ons. Your contact page should have your Phone# and where your located at and what city your in.There is no way to call you and ask questions. You can take a look at mine and get some ideas.
 
what pure shine said

also, The context of your site (including actual text, headings, photo descriptions, videos, links to and from your site, etc) needs to be relevant to how you want to come up on google or any search engine.

lets say you want to come up in "texas detailing" or something, you need to show google (not a person that can clearly see that its a detailing website) evidence that you are a detailing website. Otherwise your site will be irrelevant and nowhere near the first page, especially if you have competition in your area.

Look up "how to seo" and get some tips. Do it before you actually spend time putting more info on your site. That way, you don't waste time writing irrelevant information that will do nothing for you in terms of being seen on the internet. After figuring out some seo basics, you can get creative with your site
 
Kengo123 said:
what pure shine said

also, The context of your site (including actual text, headings, photo descriptions, videos, links to and from your site, etc) needs to be relevant to how you want to come up on google or any search engine.

lets say you want to come up in "texas detailing" or something, you need to show google (not a person that can clearly see that its a detailing website) evidence that you are a detailing website. Otherwise your site will be irrelevant and nowhere near the first page, especially if you have competition in your area.

Look up "how to seo" and get some tips. Do it before you actually spend time putting more info on your site. That way, you don't waste time writing irrelevant information that will do nothing for you in terms of being seen on the internet. After figuring out some seo basics, you can get creative with your site
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Great piece of advice. I learned this the hard way. My website looks good IMO but it's worth nothing because I didn't design my page to Google's standards so I'm on page 4 and my yelp and Facebook show up before my actual website does. For me it would now be faster to create a whole new website then it would be to fix everything.

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i went ahead and did the most i could for Abram on the very limit functionality of Weebly
 
I clicked your website and you lost me in 5 seconds. I closed the browser tab and you will probably never see me again. (So my recommendation is only based on the first 5 seconds of what i saw)

First thing i saw was a personal introduction. Next paragraph went on about how you can pick up my car. This is not eHarmony. And you haven't sold your service enough to mention anything about picking up anyone's car in the second paragraph.

When i pull up someones website, i probably already have a purpose for pulling up that website. My car looks like #### and i want it to be detailed. I don't care about the owner of the company, this is business. First thing i should see is a picture of a nice shiny car with a brief easy to read description of what you do and why i should spend money with you.

Do that and you'll increase viewership to your website ten fold. After that, check back and i'll go over part two...
 
anonymoususer said:
I clicked your website and you lost me in 5 seconds. I closed the browser tab and you will probably never see me again. (So my recommendation is only based on the first 5 seconds of what i saw)

First thing i saw was a personal introduction. Next paragraph went on about how you can pick up my car. This is not eHarmony. And you haven't sold your service enough to mention anything about picking up anyone's car in the second paragraph.

When i pull up someones website, i probably already have a purpose for pulling up that website. My car looks like #### and i want it to be detailed. I don't care about the owner of the company, this is business. First thing i should see is a picture of a nice shiny car with a brief easy to read description of what you do and why i should spend money with you.

Do that and you'll increase viewership to your website ten fold. After that, check back and i'll go over part two...
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i dont think you understand how limited weebly is...
 
When you have started to earn some more money from detailing you should up-grade to a word-press website. These sites are very easy to make it look nice and professional. Best part is word press is free along with hundreds of templates. The only cost would be hosting which would likely be under $10 a month.

Not having prices are another factor that will turn off potential customers. Some 50/50 shots will show your expertise.
 
Ok a few things...


1. Your package description will not be understood by 95% of your potential customers. The average person has no idea what the difference is between a cleaner wax and a spray wax and they will understand even less why both are in the same package. You need to give information about results of these steps not products used.

2. You site is too bland. A picture is Worth a thousand words so you might want to add a lot of them. Also it looks like a page from a word processor, use some colors.

3. Your first page should not be about you. Personally I think putting personnal info on a company website is very amateurish but most detailers do it. I guess the idea is to have a more personnal touch and sell themselves. So it's all fine if you want to do that. But it should definatelly not be the first thing people see.

So those the where my first impressions from the 2 mins I spent on your site. The average person will browse through and not read much. So it's important the feeling they get is that they want to do busines with you. The info is almost irrelevent. Just to give you an idea, I am mobile and do no have a garage. All my customers come to me from my website. It is clearly states on my website that we are mobile and do the work at the client's place or place of business. Yet, every single call I get is: "What is your address and when can I come by". So the feeling I have is that people browse through, don't read anything, get the phone number and call. So your job is to make your website make them want to call you.

Hope this helps
 
"My services aren't for everyone. If you're looking for a cheap detail or looking for the best price, then you won't find it here. I provide specialty services for clients who are looking for true professional results.

Abram, 325.829.8243
[email protected]"

Complete turn-off. You've just alienated me in the first 15 seconds. It screams elitism and arrogance.

Further, I don't want to hear about the dimensions on which you're not going to compete. If you aren't competing on price, talk up your level of service and quality. You've simply started off by telling me things you won't do.

The contact information listed directly below the intro paragraph is out of place. I'd remove it. Header/banner, footer, Contact page. All fine places to consider for contact information placement. I would leave it out of most content areas.

"I try my best to satisfy every customer who hires me to work on their vehicle."

Do or do not. There is no try.

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Summary in addition to above...

  • General spelling/grammatical errors. No big deal, easy fixes
  • Writing style (different than spelling/grammar issues)
  • Bland design, but it's a WiP, so forgiven for now. Experiment with those themes!
  • Before-and-after photos should be composed as similarly as possible
    • Changing camera angle, lighting, etc. changes context.
  • Remove emoticons
  • Remove contact info from content areas
  • Styling inconsistencies (again, easy fixes)
    • Bulleted vs. non-bulleted lists


All in all, not a bad first go at it. There's a lot of low hanging fruit (read: easy fixes). Tinker with your content as well as the various Weebly themes; you have a ready and willing canvas! When choosing a theme, think about how you want to convey your value proposition and brand. Pay attention to the sample content in those themes. Some are better suited for you than others. Keep us posted on updates!
 
Ok guys i went back and changed some things around. I changed my intro and added info to each of my packages offered!
Let me know what you think!
 
I'm on my phone right now but your first two sentences under services sound somewhat contradictory:

I provide specialty services for clients who are looking for true professional detailing. I can also help those who are on a tight budget as well.

Then scrolling further down you have two different sized text in the description of the services. A couple grammar errors and 1 capitalization error that I see.

And that's just from looking at the services page.

Glazing over the rest quickly again the mobile version the "home" page should be an about page. There is at least 1 capitalization error there as well. And honestly you sound desperate on it. That would turn me off if I was thinking about getting your services.
 
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