My Business card (criticism?)

Colinpd137

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Got these in the mail today from Vistaprint. Thought i'd go with a different template other than water droplets like quite a few detailing cards iv'e seen.
This is just a side-job for me, and do it out of my garage or mobile in my town, while i'm going to college.

I just jumped into it and starting to build a client basis. So far majority of people say its the best job they've seen done ever and will return from now on. :buffing: Makes me have a lot of pride in my work :xyxthumbs:
99% of the reason i do it, is because I really enjoy it and take my time and do my best on every job. The money is just a +.

Haze'd out my # and email address for spam reasons, hope ya'll approve! constructive criticism is always welcome!

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Colinpd137 said:
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Hate it.

Cars (plural) Trucks (plural) Suv (singular)

Interior Deep Cleaning sounds better, I don't think clay bar should be paired with sealant... actually I hate the dual column setup, I think it's the spacing between the two. I feel there is too much space. Also engine bay just feels vague...

Please forgive the crudeness of my example,

Cars, Trucks & Suvs
Interior & Exterior Treatment
Full range of services

Including but not limited to:
Hand Wash & Wax.....................Interior Deep Cleaning
Paint Decontamination................Engine Bay Cleaning
Sealant Application......................Full Paint Correction
& More!​

The dots are just there for spacing.

Also,
Call/Text for more info
or to make an appointment!


I like the idea of the mustang and the stripes, but I'm not a fan of how they run vertical, then abruptly change direction, yet the car isn't aligned with either axis... To be fair I have a wicked headache at the moment (it's also three hours past my bed time) and that could be the real reason for my dislike of the stripes, or it's the clash between Y and Z axis while the car is tilted forward throws off the perspective... Either way you should probably just ignore me on that area.

Now having said all that, your card is better then most business cards I have received and you're off to a pretty damn good start. :xyxthumbs:
 
Drunken Yak inc said:
Hate it.

Cars (plural) Trucks (plural) Suv (singular)

Interior Deep Cleaning sounds better, I don't think clay bar should be paired with sealant... actually I hate the dual column setup, I think it's the spacing between the two. I feel there is too much space. Also engine bay just feels vague...

Please forgive the crudeness of my example,

Cars, Trucks & Suvs
Interior & Exterior Treatment
Full range of services

Including but not limited to:
Hand Wash & Wax.....................Interior Deep Cleaning
Paint Decontamination................Engine Bay Cleaning
Sealant Application......................Full Paint Correction
& More!​

The dots are just there for spacing.

Also,
Call/Text for more info
or to make an appointment!


I like the idea of the mustang and the stripes, but I'm not a fan of how they run vertical, then abruptly change direction, yet the car isn't aligned with either axis... To be fair I have a wicked headache at the moment (it's also three hours past my bed time) and that could be the real reason for my dislike of the stripes, or it's the clash between Y and Z axis while the car is tilted forward throws off the perspective... Either way you should probably just ignore me on that area.

Now having said all that, your card is better then most business cards I have received and you're off to a pretty damn good start. :xyxthumbs:
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Very good constructive criticism, thanks for taking the time to write all that down and give your input! I only ordered 250 cards cause I know i'm going to change it up in the future once these are all but gone.
Now Take some Tylenol and get some rest! Again thank you :xyxthumbs:
 
I would recommend loosing the @yahoo.com e-mail address. For a small fee through Gmail, you can setup an address with your business name in it.

For example: [email protected]

This makes for a more professional impression.
 
krisgel100 said:
I would recommend loosing the @yahoo.com e-mail address. For a small fee through Gmail, you can setup an address with your business name in it.

For example: [email protected]

This makes for a more professional impression.
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Good advice!

I like the mustang layout along with the 3D impression the stripes give (obviously cause I have one) but I would suggestion the same as above with the text.
 
Also SUV is an acronym, not a word. All three letters are capitalized.

Or solve all problems: "Sport Utility Vehicles"
 
The phrasing could be improved slightly, but you biggest improvement is to get a custom e-mail address. Makes you look like someone who really cares.
 
Here's another idea, since you say your customers are generally really happy with your work:
I saw a card yesterday with the following printed on the back:

"The referral of your friends and family is the finest compliment I could ever receive."

Ask for referrals from happy customers. Vistaprint does not charge very much to get some text on the flip side of the card.
 
mswerb said:
I wouldn eliminate "Texting" as an option.
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I'm not going to totally eliminate it as an option, because iv'e pulled a few customers that way. Some people don't like to talk over the phone for unknown reasons and prefer texting when asking for prices/ect. But thank you for your opinion!

wikkid said:
Here's another idea, since you say your customers are generally really happy with your work:
I saw a card yesterday with the following printed on the back:

"The referral of your friends and family is the finest compliment I could ever receive."

Ask for referrals from happy customers. Vistaprint does not charge very much to get some text on the flip side of the card.
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Great idea, thanks! duly noted
 
It looks good to me as well,
I agree all the way don't take texting away if you got a cell phone!
People nowdays text more then talk cause it seems like that got to much other stuff going on or something like that...lol:props:

What do you guys think about the business card I'm thinking about getting printed up?Feed back please

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X-Klean said:
It looks good to me as well,
I agree all the way don't take texting away if you got a cell phone!
People nowdays text more then talk cause it seems like that got to much other stuff going on or something like that...lol:props:

What do you guys think about the business card I'm thinking about getting printed up?Feed back please

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Does your email start with www or is that a typo?
 
I would use lowercase text on "and" in Full Exterior and Interior Detailing.

Also, maintenance is spelled wrong. Use it the way I just did.

I agree with g26er. The email address seems off.

Otherwise, great start!
 
WOW can't believe I missed those but thanks for the catches:bash:. Looks like I got to redo it now.
 
Redesigned Maybe I got to much going on but this will be my last picture post on here.

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