statusdetailing
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- May 15, 2012
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One thing that I would like to say is try not to mention "Craiglist". There are some really good Detailers that are on the site. I am not one so I am not defending them. I agree with many of the others that state the services page is not right. You need better font choices, sizing, color and add items with a clear billet.
One pet peeve that drives me nuts is "We". Try to use Status Auto Detailing rather than We. Spelling out the name brings a professional look.
It nice that you mention your background but other than the business degree that one of the owners has there is no correlation to Detailing. Put more information about the detailing experiences that you both have. You mention that you spent countless hours perfecting your craft. Build on that add more information on how you did that.
In the why choose Status I would change my opening statement to something like this:
Status Auto Detailing offers personal service unlike many of the assembly line detailers. This is a positive statement and not a negative statement about your competition.
Just some thoughts to help you out. A major issue that I see on most sites is missed spelled words.
As a last point put some pictures in the gallery of your shop. A well organized shop will help sell your services.
Ed
Lot's of good points. I will definitely be removing "We." Thanks!