First attempt at a Biz card

Bodezafa

Bodezafa

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Feed back please
 
I think you are going to want something a little more sleek and smooth. You want you B/C to represent you just as your work represents you. I think that top font might need to be changed, that might help to improve it. Is there any other info you are going to want on there, or just your phone number, name and biz name?
 
Too dark in my opinion. Too busy might turn off some of the market. Also the font on your phone number is impossible to read. Just kidding about the font part :)
 
I like that it's 'in your face', but it is very busy. The background noise behind the car distracts from the company name. Maybe move your name & phone# to the bottom black band, try different fonts / colors, make the background more transparent. Realize it's a first draft, just some suggestions.
 
It looks too much like a movie poster to me. I know you are doing the play on words but I think you should generate a more serious image.
 
Since you asked.......... It's gaudy and not at all professional looking.
 
I would drop the R8 as it makes people feel their car isn't worthy enough. Lose the flames as they have nothing to do with detailing. The yellow font on black background is extremely aggressive and may turn people away. I'm also not to keen on the font choice.
 
Thanks guys.
I appreciate the honesty. This is my first attempt at most of this and need lots of help. I feel I cant really get out there till I get the business card part done.
Ill keep working at it:xyxthumbs:
 
I think it looks pretty sweet. I would suggest smaller font for your name. Other than that, it's just a biz card and the only thing that really matters is that people recognize it's your business and can easily read the phone #, at least long enough to save it to their cell contacts or toss it in the glove box. If it was a flyer or ad, it's a different story... and everything needs to look clean and legible.
 
I actually own a printing company and have seen thousands of business cards. That first one wasn't good.

I like the second one. The type is too close to the edge. I would break the tag line into 2 lines of text. You might want to include an email address and website if you have one.

One thing to consider is paper stock. With that image, you are going to want a glossy stock. Get the thickest stock you can - thick, stiff business cards are in.

Also, you can add additional information on the back.

I think you are on the right track!
 
Z71 said:
I actually own a printing company and have seen thousands of business cards. That first one wasn't good.

I like the second one. The type is too close to the edge. I would break the tag line into 2 lines of text. You might want to include an email address and website if you have one.

One thing to consider is paper stock. With that image, you are going to want a glossy stock. Get the thickest stock you can - thick, stiff business cards are in.

Also, you can add additional information on the back.

I think you are on the right track!
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:welcome: hi!
 
I like the in your face pop of the first one and honestly that image will stick in my mind but as it was posted prior it is real gawdy! The second one is very nice and conservative and will do better but as said before the words are a bit to close to the edge... otherwise looking good...
 
Bodezafa said:
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i would still bring down more the House of Waxx part or give it a bigger font size.
"bring back...." part have in the center of the card.

example:

House of Waxx
Auto Detailing​

also keep in mind that the typical business card is 2"x3.5", this card is a little too much height when brought back to scale(it is at about 7"x11.5" here. scaling would be the same if it were 6"x10.5"). so the final product will be a little more shorter thus compacting everything so to speak. hope that makes sense.
 
CrownKote said:
Better! can you decrease the size of your name and position? keep the number the same size but add your email or website if possible? it looks great and is coming along!
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You should get a web site and add it to the card. It will showcase your work, etc.
 
The second one is looking nice. Id say change the "bringing the feeling" phrase. Come up with a simple but catchy slogan thats no more than 6 words. Then come up with a USP (Unique Selling Proposition) as well. Thats pretty much why should a consumer choose you over your competitors. Add a domain name and an email address that has that domain name extension. You can also consider having a custom logo for branding instead of font words. Hope that helps!
 
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