New detail menu; looking for feedback

Based on your brochure, I would predict a very successful detail business. Good Luck.
 
so i think im going to be the only one who disagrees here..

but the whole brochure was talking about yourself:
I do my best to accomplish these goals
I have the ability to provide mobile
Feel free to contact me to see what I can
At Elevated Shine Auto Detailing, quality
My name is Justin and I have been involved with cars and detailing
I am a car enthusiast,
I truly enjoy the whole
My services are mobile,
For a small additional charge, I can also perform

you did a lot of talking about yourself... but what did you offer the person reading the brochure?

I do my best to accomplish these goals by utilizing the latest techniques and products in the detailing industry, as well as providing personalized car care and customer service.
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no one cares about you.. they only care about themselves

I'm not being rude.. this is a principle i was taught to write copy.

no one cares what you use or how high tech you are.. all they want to know is "CAN YOU FIX MY PROBLEM????"

i dont think many people will read most of it because 1) it's boring 2) no value 3) you're throwing a lot of serves and prices in there face
 
Spot on man, great work!

Air freshener scent maybe?

And under extra surface maybe glass sealant? I know a lot of people are always like, "Oh! Can you do that thing that makes the water just fly off my windshield while driving!?"
 
By the way, I noticed that you specified the time it'd take to do each detailing levels. For example, "1-2 hours" in Level 1 Detail. Does that include the interior? Thank you.
 
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