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RhetoricMixes

RhetoricMixes

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Hey guys and gals first off id like to say thank you for all the precious info ive learned from this forum since i joined last December. It was overwhelming at first but I have since grown as a enthusiast and as a person since I started detailing cars and I feel blessed getting to work on wonderful cars left and right :xyxthumbs: .

Anyways I just got my domain and web site set up and this is the first time ive ever designed or done anything like this. Let me know what yall think Square One Detailing - Home

Theres more to come as well since im in the works to get my logo designed and im kinda new to creating a page for my business on facebook.
 
Nice web site,,,Pictures are really good. Only thing i would say is the font is harder to read in the style you have picked. Could just be me as im over the hill >)
 
Web site is good, but I would include some "before" pictures along with the finished product...whick look great by the way!
 
@RhetoricMixes

^ I agree as well, the font is difficult to read hence, the reader is spending time trying to figure out each heading and losing focus on the services and fees.

Also, not a bad idea adding a row of bullets under each section — just ensure that your audience understands what you're trying to sell.

You may want to revise the way you're presenting the "brands we carry" because all you're doing is enlarging the image of the brand / manufacturer — by creating this as a hyperlink the user expects additional information about the brand that you carry.

Just my two cents as a technical writer.
 
1. Font is hard to read, definately pick something else.

2. On your home page, a before and after pic may be nice.

3. "Brands We Carry" implies you are selling those products. Maybe it should read "Top Professional Brands We use"

4. The logos are hyperlinks to a larger picture. Remove the links as they don't really do anything.

5. When you list items, like under your packages, indent the second line that wraps around so the "-" stands out for each seperate item.

Overall looks very good.
 
I appreciate the comments everybody and ive revised everything listed that yall told me except the font and brand pics. Im having a hard time having the pictures just be there as pictures instead of popping up as a image gallery. If i could get past that id be golden. And as far as the text goes are yall having a hard time reading the paragraph titles or the actual text of the site itself?
 
RhetoricMixes said:
And as far as the text goes are yall having a hard time reading the paragraph titles or the actual text of the site itself?
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Whatever font you are using is very hard to read. You need an entirerly different font. The large red titles are fine. Everything in black needs a different font.

Just noticed, your link to Facebook is a red logo. Isn't Facebook usually a blue logo?
 
I would definitely change the font, and not use case letters. It looks very informal and it's a headache to read.

Your phone number and location should be on your front page without having to scroll down to find it.

On your scheduling page, the paragraph has a couple typos and you forgot a word or two in some places.

Each pricing and service area has "packages" but looks like only one package is offered for each service.

Pick up the book "Don't Make Me Think" if you plan on doing your website yourself, you are missing a lot of basic web usability standards. It will help you structure your content better and more effectively.

Don't Make Me Think: A Common Sense Approach to Web Usability, 2nd Edition: Steve Krug: 9780321344755: Amazon.com: Books

Hope that gets you started :)
 
scrace said:
I would definitely change the font, and not use case letters. It looks very informal and it's a headache to read.

Your phone number and location should be on your front page without having to scroll down to find it.

On your scheduling page, the paragraph has a couple typos and you forgot a word or two in some places.

Each pricing and service area has "packages" but looks like only one package is offered for each service.

Pick up the book "Don't Make Me Think" if you plan on doing your website yourself, you are missing a lot of basic web usability standards. It will help you structure your content better and more effectively.

Don't Make Me Think: A Common Sense Approach to Web Usability, 2nd Edition: Steve Krug: 9780321344755: Amazon.com: Books

Hope that gets you started :)
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@RhetoricMixes

In addition to the suggested book, I would like to recommend this write up by Jakob Nielsen: 10 High-Profit Redesign Priorities

Caveat: Not all ten priorities apply to your site but it's a good read and I use it all the time.
 
RhetoricMixes said:
I tried but the theme i selected will only make it red. Im gonna keep trying though.
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What software did you use to create your website?

I highly suggest wordpress, it's free and there are a lot of free versatile themes that are intuitive to use. You don't need to know any web programming but it sure does help. Also, there are tons of youtube and blog tutorials to help you get started.
 
scrace said:
What software did you use to create your website?

I highly suggest wordpress, it's free and there are a lot of free versatile themes that are intuitive to use. You don't need to know any web programming but it sure does help. Also, there are tons of youtube and blog tutorials to help you get started.
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I tried to keep it simple so I signed up for a place called weebly. I like their tools as its all based on drag and drop where i want pictures, paragraphs and what not. If the only downside is not being able to choose my facebook icon color im willing to lose that since the interface is dead simple to use.
 
Dougw4355 said:
Nice web site,,,Pictures are really good. Only thing i would say is the font is harder to read in the style you have picked. Could just be me as im over the hill >)
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Dont worry its not just you :xyxthumbs: . Font has been changed, let me know if its easier to read now.

NickZ28 said:
Web site is good, but I would include some "before" pictures along with the finished product...whick look great by the way!
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I am definitely looking into adding more before and after pictures soon and thanks for the comments!

lp700four said:
@RhetoricMixes

^ I agree as well, the font is difficult to read hence, the reader is spending time trying to figure out each heading and losing focus on the services and fees.

Also, not a bad idea adding a row of bullets under each section — just ensure that your audience understands what you're trying to sell.

You may want to revise the way you're presenting the "brands we carry" because all you're doing is enlarging the image of the brand / manufacturer — by creating this as a hyperlink the user expects additional information about the brand that you carry.

Just my two cents as a technical writer.
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Added the bullets, boy they made a difference :) . I also revised the way i worded the brands i use. thanks!

explorerlyon said:
1. Font is hard to read, definately pick something else.

2. On your home page, a before and after pic may be nice.

3. "Brands We Carry" implies you are selling those products. Maybe it should read "Top Professional Brands We use"

4. The logos are hyperlinks to a larger picture. Remove the links as they don't really do anything.

5. When you list items, like under your packages, indent the second line that wraps around so the "-" stands out for each seperate item.

Overall looks very good.
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Ive done most of the changes you recommended except for the hyperlinks with the brand pictures. For some reason I cannot figure out how to add them as just static pics without enlarging them when clicked. Thanks for the help.

scrace said:
I would definitely change the font, and not use case letters. It looks very informal and it's a headache to read.

Your phone number and location should be on your front page without having to scroll down to find it.

On your scheduling page, the paragraph has a couple typos and you forgot a word or two in some places.

Each pricing and service area has "packages" but looks like only one package is offered for each service.

Pick up the book "Don't Make Me Think" if you plan on doing your website yourself, you are missing a lot of basic web usability standards. It will help you structure your content better and more effectively.
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I changed the font and got rid of the case letters (cant believe i did that in the first place). Also added the location and phone number to the front page. Fixed the typos and also fixed my packages error. I will also definitely look into that book, thanks a lot!
 
Looks much better.

Phone Number: Inconsistend format, 979- and (979). Use one format consistently. If you use (979), be sure to add a space after the ).

At the bottom of the home page after the company name and number, add your location. Someoen stumbeling across your website needs to know where you are.


Phone number at the top red banner needs to be larger.
 
I did a major overhaul of how i organized things on the site. Changed fonts, added better pictures, categories, links and whatnot. If anyone feels like critiquing it any further id appreciate it. I also found out that i am able to change the facebook logo to blue but only if i edit the actual html code (which I don't know how to do).
 
I like the site. Do you have a full blown inerior detail? You interior detail seems to be more of an express detail. I've found that most of my customers care more about their interior, and that service seems to be very lacking on your site.

I really like the services page. The exterior prices and services seem very good. But, like I said, you may want to consider another interior option. Also, fabric protection is a very lucrative add on.
 
RhetoricMixes said:
I did a major overhaul of how i organized things on the site. Changed fonts, added better pictures, categories, links and whatnot. If anyone feels like critiquing it any further id appreciate it. I also found out that i am able to change the facebook logo to blue but only if i edit the actual html code (which I don't know how to do).
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The Jeep photos link goes to the G37. It's the only thing that I noticed. :xyxthumbs:
 
Also, try to replace, "us" and "we" with "square one detailing" or "square one" whenever possible. It looks more professional.
 
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